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제목 I Recommend you a bicycle "Birdy"[1] 등록일 2014-10-02
내용 Hi , I just wrote this article to recommend you a bike "Birdy". Birdy is foldable and compact bike. I don't have ever seen such good bike! Since my space is limited and there are too many stuffs to keep, saving space is very important issue!
I usually park my bike out of my house. When it's raining, it is very sad to watch my bike going to be wet. And there is capability of theft of my bike(or the parts of it, wheels and chair) !!
So I was finding the one that is very easy to carry and keep. And it has to has good performance. But it was really hard to find, because there are few essential conditions to satisfy me.
Condition No1. : The bike must has gear shift system(at least 8 degree of it).
Condition No2. : Wheels of the bike must bigger than 16"(for the speed).
Condition No3.(most important) : Must easy to fold and unfold.
Condition No4.(Conditional) : Suspension system, light weight, easy to repair, Good Design...
(to be continued)
담당강사 Ayana2 등록일 2014-10-06
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Hi Wonjun,

Thanks for the recommendation. I was looking at folding bikes online. I think I may get one next year. 

Best,

Ayana

 

Hi , I just wrote this article to recommend you a  the "Birdy" bike to you. The Birdy is foldable and compact bike. I don't have never seen such a good bike! Since I have a limited amount of space my space is limited and I have too much there are too many stuff to keep, saving space is a very important issue! I usually park my bike outside of my house. When it's raining, it is very sad to watch my bike going getting to be wet. And there is capability the possibility of theft of my bike(or the parts of it, like wheels and or the chair) !! So I was finding looking for the one that is very easy to carry and keep store. And it has to has good performance perform well. But it was really hard to find, because there are  few essential conditions to satisfy me that I needed . Condition No1. : The bike must has  have a  gear shift system(at least 8 degrees of it). Condition No2. : the Wheels of the bike must  be bigger than 16"(for the speed). Condition No3.(most important) : Must  be easy to fold and unfold. Condition No4.(Conditional) : Suspension system, light weight, easy to repair, Good Design... (to be continued)

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