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제목 singing in a group 등록일 2014-11-25
내용 I enjoy singing with my colleagues.
We often sing American pop music together.
I like all kinds of songs but among them I like 'words' by F.R David and 'close to you' and 'yesterday ones more’ by carpenters.
‘Words’ is the American song that I first listened.
I have listened to 'close to you' and ‘yesterday ones more' since 20 years ago.
My friend recommends me them.
When I first listened to that song, I was quite amazing because the songs are quite soft and sweet.
Whenever my coworker and I sing songs by in chorus, I feel like sad and solemn.
Singing music helps me to relieve stress and relax my mind.
담당강사 Lovely 등록일 2014-11-26
첨삭 내용

I enjoy singing with my colleagues. We often sing American pop music together. I like all kinds of songs but among them I like 'words' by F.R David and 'close to you' and 'yesterday ones more’ by carpenters. ‘Words’ is the American song that I first listened. I have listened to 'close to you' and ‘yesterday ones more' since 20 years ago. My friend recommends me them. When I first listened to that song, I was quite amazing because the songs are quite soft and sweet. Whenever my coworker and I sing songs by in chorus, I feel like sad and solemn. Singing music helps me to relieve stress and relax my mind.

1. I enjoy singing with my colleagues. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

2. We often sing American pop music together. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

3. I like all kinds of songs but among them I like 'words' by F.R David and 'close to you' and 'yesterday ones more’ by carpenters.
-> I like all kinds of songs but among them, I like "Words" by F.R David and "Close to You" and "Yesterday Ones More" by Carpenters.

4. ‘Words’ is the American song that I first listened . -> "Words" is the American song that I have first listened to.

5. I have listened to 'close to you' and ‘yesterday ones more' since 20 years ago. -> I had listened to "Close to You" and "Yesterday Ones More" last 20 years ago.

6. My friend recommends me them. -> My friend recommended those to me.

7. When I first listened to that song, I was quite amazing because the songs are quite soft and sweet. -> When I have first listened to that song, I was quite amazed because the songs are quite soft and sweet.

8. Whenever my coworker and I sing songs by in chorus, I feel like sad and solemn. -> GOOD JOB! smileyyes

9. Singing music helps me to relieve stress and relax my mind.  -> Singing songs helps me to relieve stress and relax my mind.

Hi Kent,

Kudos! You have expressed your thoughts very well. You also have a good taste in terms of music by the way. You have composed the sentences better, just be careful with the correct capitalization and verb forms. Other than that, you did a good job! Keep it up! :-)


 

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