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제목 | unit 17 chatting on economy | 등록일 | 2015-02-14 |
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내용 | 1. terrible - recent economic inequality of income situation of south korea is terrible according to the material issuedd by OECD, in paticular inequality of income 2. worse - the physical appearance of father of my coworker was worse than the weeks ago 3. choke - the planning anc financial government have choked off the increase rate of public institution. so the level of th workers of public institution was less than that of big private company 4. inflation - as the possibility of occuranc of deplation increase in south korea, i concern that the influenc of that could be destructive than that of inflation because of terrible experienc of big deplation in 1929. 5. positive - although bad things take place, you should keep in mind the importance of lovers, for example family. 6. debt - it is essential that the management of expense of money than earning money is important to less your debt. 5. |
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담당강사 | Wynston1 | 등록일 | 2015-02-16 |
첨삭 내용 | 1. terrible - recent economic inequality of income situation of south korea is terrible according to the material issuedd by OECD, in paticular inequality of income 2. worse - the physical appearance of father of my coworker was worse than the weeks ago 3. choke - the planning anc financial government have choked off the increase rate of public institution. so the level of th workers of public institution was less than that of big private company 4. inflation - as the possibility of occuranc of deplation increase in south korea, i concern that the influenc of that could be destructive than that of inflation because of terrible experienc of big deplation in 1929. 5. positive - although bad things take place, you should keep in mind the importance of lovers, for example family. 6. debt - it is essential that the management of expense of money than earning money is important to less your debt. 5.
*** TIGER - YOUR SENTENCES ARE FAR TO COMPLEX. TRY AND WRITE SHORTER SENTENCES THAT CONVEY THE (ACTUAL) MEANING OF THE WORD YOU ARE WRITING ABOUT. FOR EXAMPLE: Terrible - "The weather was terrible yesterday, but it is more pleasant today". [YOU MUST COMMUNICATE TO THE READER/LISTENER 'COMPARISONS' FOR THE WORD 'TERRIBLE', SO THAT THE WORD IS FULLY UNDERSTOOD. IN MY SIMPLE SENTENCE, I USED THE WORD, "PLEASANT", AS THE OPPOSITE OF "TERRIBLE", SO THAT MY READER UNDERSTANDS WHAT TERRIBLE MEANS.] |